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Tuesday, April 17, 2012

Ben's Leads


Compare and contrast-
In 1946 televisions were small, bulky, boxes owned by only .5% of United States families. Today, however, the majority Americans own over two televisions and they have gotten as big as 100 inches.

Startling Statement-
Most Americans consider television to be a good thing, but some experts say it is taking over our lives.

Descriptive-
I walked into Jim Girardeau’s office, carefully stepping over parts of computer chips and foam packing peanuts that littered the ground. He was bent over a small chip with a soldering gun, meticulously burning on parts of the delicate piece of technology. Hesitant to interrupt, I waited until he was done and then asked the first question.

3 comments:

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  2. I like your ideas, and I think these have potential. I really like the descriptive lead, but you might want to reconsider using first person. Also your startling statement is okay, but it's kind of short. I thought the compare and contrast has a good base idea, but you might want to elaborate a little. Overall the first one is my favorite.

    -Annie Murphy

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  3. I like the descriptive one as well, but like Annie, I believe that you should fix the first one... overall I like them.
    -Jackie

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