Startling statement: Garbage is usually treated as a burden and a nuisance. But this new technology promises to make it a commodity.
Descriptive: The United States is drowning in garbage. Large metropolitan areas such as New York City dump tons of trash into the ocean, creating large dead zones. In the Virgin Islands, landfills on the beach leach toxic chemicals into the water. If trash is burned, it releases toxic fumes and results in toxic ash. Getting rid of waste is a difficult problem and there seems to be no easy solutions. However, there is a new technology that could get rid of all of these problems and provide energy at the same time.
Contrast and Compare: Currently
garbage is put in a landfill or dumped in the ocean. But a new technology could get rid of waste
and produce energy at the same time.
Lead 1: Good start. Although I think the statement has an opportunity to make an effect, I do not believe that the wording and diction is powerful enough to make it worth a startling statement.
ReplyDeleteLead 2: My personal favorite. The description of different toxic wastelands flooded with garbage is really interesting. It helps make the ending statement about how garbage can be used effectively really powerful. Once again, I would try using somewhat more potent language.
Lead 3: Good idea. However, I might try using either longer descriptions or different wording in order to make the lead more of a hook.
- Cassidy